Thank you- I'm investigating as to why this happened. It never happened before, so I want to prevent this from happening in the future releases. I'll do what I can to get it done for my lovely readers like yourself.
This was the Greates game i ever read in my intire life and you should make more parts is was talking about 10 or 11 but it was a really great story and i reallyyy hope you make more off this game😁🙏
Hii! At the moment, some aspects of the VN is being tested by patrons. The sprites, BGs and as well as CG scenes will be reworked as well. I'm deciding on when to release the public version after I've made sure it looks great start. I believe our readers can expect a lovely Christmas gift.
Thank you for asking! The guide is being worked on currently, and will be released sometimes soon. In this case, it will be on our Tales of Onyx Discord server as well.
You are gladly welcome. Once figuring out how to download(patreon(, completed my first run through the story to this point. Thanks for the new addiction XD
Heh, I'm glad! You can always replay, see what and how your choices will change the course of this story line too! (Along with multiple husbandos even).
Why yes, it does have NSFW materials dotted across the chapters. ^_^
It depends on your choices made every chapter. For example, there is one CG scene with Rubio at the very beginning- to get there, make sure you play your choices in Rubio's favor. At least until during the Fox Den event you'll have access to many CG scenes that will eventually become available.
So there's very few vns that make me physically want to dive into the creators world and this is one such vn. i discovered this one 2 days ago and im eager to see whats next ^^
Hi, maybe It's too late to say this. But I found what I think is a grammar error. The line in question goes "I sat down to hug my legs, an buries my face into my arms." The word "buries" would be replaced by "bury". "Buries" is used for third person, as I have been taught. Sorry if this is incorrect. English is not my native language. XD
Hi ZelarP, would you like to join our Discord server where you can post the mistakes there instead of here? Rev might be able to explain better than I could! My native language is ASL, not English. ^_^
Quick question, how do I play these games on iPhone? Sorry this isn’t entirely specific to this game but I want to try this one and some others out but can’t open the iOS app files or dmg files and can’t find a fix that doesn’t need a computer (my computer is dead at the moment). Any help would be super appreciated:3
This is actually a great question to ask. I took a moment to research and see if it is possible for you to be able to play any other VNs on your iPhone. (I have my iPhone too, it would be so nice to make this come to reality!)
This is what I found- and checked with Ren'Py website. So far, this appears that I would need to create iOS distribution version. As a developer myself, I could honestly make this happen just for you and probably others who stop by. My only concern is that it mentioned several drawbacks when creating the iOS version, this is something I have to try and test to make sure it really works.
No worries, I’m just in a crappy situation with my laptop in need of repair and my only online access is with my portable devices or my Xbox. Once I get life sorted back on track it shouldn’t be an issue. For now I can try the browser-optional games if needed. Thanks for the feedback! :3
Thank you for asking! Referring to the husbandos picture I posted on main page- we can see there will be six husbandos. Counting three husbands we have met so far... We, the readers, are actively building up the love points based on choices made. After we have learned about these husbandos we met, we will be able to choose (IF set # of love points are met) one of them to go on a different route. Choose wisely, for there are alternative endings and only one TRUE ending. <3
Sorry! I forgot to add one thing- We are currently in first arc as known as "Pharyna Arc". Patreon Version 2.5 is pretty close to the ending of first arc. Somewhere in the second arc AKA "Decomphi Arc", that will be when the possible routes come into play for us to choose. ^_^
Quick question, out of curiosity, is Charos bisexual? he seems to have some sort of fixation with boobs, and if that's the case, will we get a FemalexMale scene sometime? :3
Hahaha xP. Charos is gay, but we do have bisexual characters to meet somewhere in the VN. As for this specific scene, that is a good question left for the future. ^_^
I wanted to read it because the art looks really nice but the way it’s written is so distractingly wonky right off the bat that I couldn’t bring myself to finish the prologue.
From that very limited reading I get the impression that you should really consider getting an editor, or equivalent.
Thank you for your kind opinion! Can you please explain what you meant by “distractingly wonky”? This is a very first complaint I have received. Would like to understand you better. ^_^
Sure, let me explain and point out some places where that happens.
What I mean is that the wording in lot of sentences sounds unnatural to me and grammatical errors seem pretty common. I find that distracting and unpleasant.
(I’m writing these pretty quickly and a couple might come across as a bit nit-picky, but I hope my point comes across.)
For example, the very first line, “[…] In a appearance of black crystal.” (weird wording), later on “[…] Onyx fed the planet with necessary ingredients to create life.” (missing ‘the’ before ‘ingredients’) , then right after “Just like mother nurses her baby […]” (missing ‘a’ before ‘mother’), then “The barren, primordial world became a habitable planet enough to sustain life. […]” (‘a habitable enough planet’ or ‘a planet habitable enough’ work, but not ‘a habitalbe planet enough’), “Onyx knew there will be […]” (‘there would be’), “Fearing Opan will destroy […]” (‘would destroy’), “That is known as the trio of guardians.” (‘They are’, not ‘That is’), “At last ditch effort […]” (‘As a’, not ‘At’).
Errors like these being this common just gives the impression the writing was done without the proper care, you know? To me it’s the writing equivalent of a very bad first impression, and that’s why I drop vns and novels that have them at the beginning.
Thanks ^_^ We will be having six routes, currently there are two routes available on public version right now- and about to have another two routes available on Patreon access.
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where's the download button At?
This is fixed now, I will be making announcement. Please try again and it should work properly. ^_^
I have the same issue as him. \/
Replied to the OP below. Investigating the problem! Thank you!
Sorry, I downloaded version 2.7 and did not find the exe file in the archive or in the unpacked folder, where is it?
Thank you- I'm investigating as to why this happened. It never happened before, so I want to prevent this from happening in the future releases. I'll do what I can to get it done for my lovely readers like yourself.
This was the Greates game i ever read in my intire life and you should make more parts is was talking about 10 or 11 but it was a really great story and i reallyyy hope you make more off this game😁🙏
Thank you! Chapter Ten/Eleven, right?
Will a public version be released soon? I just want to know information
Hii! At the moment, some aspects of the VN is being tested by patrons. The sprites, BGs and as well as CG scenes will be reworked as well. I'm deciding on when to release the public version after I've made sure it looks great start. I believe our readers can expect a lovely Christmas gift.
Oh, that's awesome. So I'll be looking forward to read it
Is there any guide to this game ? Like how to get all nsfw scenes or how to get all the hearts of certain characters?
Thank you for asking! The guide is being worked on currently, and will be released sometimes soon. In this case, it will be on our Tales of Onyx Discord server as well.
I know there is a discord but I want to make this post here.
I just read the whole public update in one go! I got too immersed and couldn't stop. Now, I shall go to your patreon because I need more!
A beautiful story that you've created and can't wait to see it grow!
Aww, thank you! That meant a lot to me. ^_^
You are gladly welcome. Once figuring out how to download(patreon(, completed my first run through the story to this point. Thanks for the new addiction XD
Heh, I'm glad! You can always replay, see what and how your choices will change the course of this story line too! (Along with multiple husbandos even).
Learned that i got lucky and didn't get any bad end. Tried a couple different choices on the big epic fight and died twice.
does it have NSFW ?
Why yes, it does have NSFW materials dotted across the chapters. ^_^
It depends on your choices made every chapter. For example, there is one CG scene with Rubio at the very beginning- to get there, make sure you play your choices in Rubio's favor. At least until during the Fox Den event you'll have access to many CG scenes that will eventually become available.
I can't seem to find the discord, could someone please point it out or send a link? Thanks.
https://discord.gg/ZtHJfXGUyk
There you go ^_^
Thank you so much, and thanks for creating this amazing vn, it is one of my favorites!
I loved
So there's very few vns that make me physically want to dive into the creators world and this is one such vn. i discovered this one 2 days ago and im eager to see whats next ^^
Aww. Thank you so much, it made my day to see your kind comment here. ^_^
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Any advice for the battle against charos?
The story really piqued my mind, like wow! This VN is definitely recommended in my opinion.
Can't wait for the upcoming updates :D
I'm glad you enjoyed reading!!
Hi, maybe It's too late to say this. But I found what I think is a grammar error. The line in question goes "I sat down to hug my legs, an buries my face into my arms." The word "buries" would be replaced by "bury". "Buries" is used for third person, as I have been taught. Sorry if this is incorrect. English is not my native language. XD
Still, I'm liking this novel so far. Thank you!
Thank you, I'll ask Rev to look into it. ^_^
Okay, I found another mistake. "Grab" changes to "grabs". This time is third person :3
Hi ZelarP, would you like to join our Discord server where you can post the mistakes there instead of here? Rev might be able to explain better than I could! My native language is ASL, not English. ^_^
Oh, Right. I didn't notice that there's a discord server. Thank you.
I saw the thumbnail and immediately downloaded it, amazing VN so far!
Thank you! ^_^
Quick question, how do I play these games on iPhone? Sorry this isn’t entirely specific to this game but I want to try this one and some others out but can’t open the iOS app files or dmg files and can’t find a fix that doesn’t need a computer (my computer is dead at the moment). Any help would be super appreciated:3
This is actually a great question to ask. I took a moment to research and see if it is possible for you to be able to play any other VNs on your iPhone. (I have my iPhone too, it would be so nice to make this come to reality!)
https://www.reddit.com/r/RenPy/comments/o2sjtr/ios/
This is what I found- and checked with Ren'Py website. So far, this appears that I would need to create iOS distribution version. As a developer myself, I could honestly make this happen just for you and probably others who stop by. My only concern is that it mentioned several drawbacks when creating the iOS version, this is something I have to try and test to make sure it really works.
No worries, I’m just in a crappy situation with my laptop in need of repair and my only online access is with my portable devices or my Xbox. Once I get life sorted back on track it shouldn’t be an issue. For now I can try the browser-optional games if needed. Thanks for the feedback! :3
No problem! ^_^
Yo hella typos in this game lol
I'm aware of the typos. They will be fixed, as you know, VNs like mine are under development as time goes by. :)
I'm in love with this story tho. It's great. keep it up
What are the possible routes for Version 2.2?
Thank you for asking! Referring to the husbandos picture I posted on main page- we can see there will be six husbandos. Counting three husbands we have met so far... We, the readers, are actively building up the love points based on choices made.
After we have learned about these husbandos we met, we will be able to choose (IF set # of love points are met) one of them to go on a different route. Choose wisely, for there are alternative endings and only one TRUE ending. <3
Sorry! I forgot to add one thing- We are currently in first arc as known as "Pharyna Arc". Patreon Version 2.5 is pretty close to the ending of first arc. Somewhere in the second arc AKA "Decomphi Arc", that will be when the possible routes come into play for us to choose. ^_^
wow.. I didn't expect that flower thingy will actually talk, it is a nice thing tho..
That gary boy is very attractive and I'm sure I'm not the only one who think so eh.. *wink *wink
Hehe, oh yeah. We'll learn more about these plants from Decomphi.
You're not the only one too! xP
Quick question, out of curiosity, is Charos bisexual? he seems to have some sort of fixation with boobs, and if that's the case, will we get a FemalexMale scene sometime? :3
Hahaha xP. Charos is gay, but we do have bisexual characters to meet somewhere in the VN. As for this specific scene, that is a good question left for the future. ^_^
I just downloaded this game a few days ago and there is a new update already so I didn’t have to wait long ✨
I've only known Gary for about 3 minutes, but I already love this man!
I wanted to read it because the art looks really nice but the way it’s written is so distractingly wonky right off the bat that I couldn’t bring myself to finish the prologue.
From that very limited reading I get the impression that you should really consider getting an editor, or equivalent.
Thank you for your kind opinion! Can you please explain what you meant by “distractingly wonky”? This is a very first complaint I have received. Would like to understand you better. ^_^
Sure, let me explain and point out some places where that happens.
What I mean is that the wording in lot of sentences sounds unnatural to me and grammatical errors seem pretty common. I find that distracting and unpleasant.
(I’m writing these pretty quickly and a couple might come across as a bit nit-picky, but I hope my point comes across.)
For example, the very first line, “[…] In a appearance of black crystal.” (weird wording), later on “[…] Onyx fed the planet with necessary ingredients to create life.” (missing ‘the’ before ‘ingredients’) , then right after “Just like mother nurses her baby […]” (missing ‘a’ before ‘mother’), then “The barren, primordial world became a habitable planet enough to sustain life. […]” (‘a habitable enough planet’ or ‘a planet habitable enough’ work, but not ‘a habitalbe planet enough’), “Onyx knew there will be […]” (‘there would be’), “Fearing Opan will destroy […]” (‘would destroy’), “That is known as the trio of guardians.” (‘They are’, not ‘That is’), “At last ditch effort […]” (‘As a’, not ‘At’).
Errors like these being this common just gives the impression the writing was done without the proper care, you know? To me it’s the writing equivalent of a very bad first impression, and that’s why I drop vns and novels that have them at the beginning.
Thanks for your input, I will review and make changes!
I want more... I must contain myself i shall patiently wait now i hope to see more
I'm interested I like the plot and the mc, I'm also interested in how many riuntes are our rn 🤔
Thanks ^_^ We will be having six routes, currently there are two routes available on public version right now- and about to have another two routes available on Patreon access.